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The Great Mystery
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One 2. wintery day billy sally and Joe was walking in the park. It was Christmas eve we seen some thing in the air we didn't know what it was. 7. They looked closer it was Santa he was stealing the gives I told mom and she said “ ok but be back” I started to follow him. We were heading north a long way north 5. I lost sight of him. We were up at the north pole I said to billy and sally “why would Santa be at the north pole he should be at 4. china or somewhere”. But that place is so big you cant find him if your live depended on it. Then I found a elf I asked him where Santa the elf said “he's at his house” “thank-you” said billy. They went to Santa's house and Joe 3. was talking to Santa then Joe smacked him around 1. “hahaha” billy laugh he still wouldn't confess to the stolen gives. Then their was the gives so I tired to bust him. I tired to take him down but that big guy I couldn't bough him. So I tried to call the cops but their was no service in the building so I went out side and I called them they said “I will be their in a while”. So I went back in their and he wasn't in their so me billy and sally ran around the north pole no sight of him so billy asked a elf “Wheres Santa” the elf said “He went to hes sleigh” hes about to take off so I thou him off and the cops came here and busted Santa and 5. I got a 1000 dollar reward. Joe didn't think that the cops would come and all the kids got their gives the next day. ||

This is my story By:Bow2010

The Missing Chocolate bar By
 * Bow**

Mrs.O sees somebody running down the road, and wonder if it was Boxman?

After cleaning up Mrs.O heads to the fridge for her nightly chocolate bar. IT WAS GONE..................

Mrs.O phones detective Rogers. I hop on my skateboard and ride over to Mrs. O's house with my assistant Firethrout.

Mrs. O tells me how she was having a Halloween party for all the students from school. She tells me how she saw someone looking like Boxman running down the road...

We head over to Boxman's house, to ask if he knows who stole Mrs. O's chocolate bar. Boxman replies”No,who would do such a thing?”. I tell Boxman that he is lying,because.....

He has chocolate all over his face.

thief by Mr.Waddles One day I went to school and all of the pencils and pens were gone from the whole school. Mr N let us all go home.

The next day every thing was gone except for desks and chairs. Stopwatch and I decided to investigate and tried to think ho would do such a thing. Bob and Walter came to our mind, so we headed to Bobs and Walter locker they where guys that hated school.

Mrs E allowed us to open his locker to check for stolen items. As I was checking I found a crack in the back. I grabbed it and pulled back, and there was all the stolen items. We went to track down Bob who was roaming in the hallway. Then Walter met us by the lockers with a lot of questions. He followed us up the hall were we found Bob.

Who do you think stole all the items

Bob or Walter

It was Walter, because he hated school, and he thought everybody else did, so he wanted to free us.

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